Should a city try to preserve its old, historic buildings or destroy them and replace them with modern buildings? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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on going
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debate on
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if
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cities should keep the old structures which preserve historic meaning. Or deconstruct them and build more
nowaday
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like buildings
instead
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. Personally, I understand the effort to modernise the
metropolitans
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. But I strongly support not
to demolish
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old structures under any
circumstance
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.
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, the old constructions hold huge
benefit
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in order to attract tourists to do observation.
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occassion
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occasion
increases the
entering money
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to
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the country. London is a major example. The magnificent architecture is a huge source of income. Even though
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these houses are suffering from some disadvantages caused by being old.
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is only a tiny problem to face. The restorations provided by
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almost
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discharges
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this
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issue.
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, more modern skyscrapers allow more space for offices.
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rises
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the earned money even more than tourist visits. These constructions use the space quite
sustainable
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.
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, money is not as important as history.
Distroying
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Destroying
churches and replacing them with skyscrapers is not a good idea.
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matter will shadow the culture. With the creation of the internet, people
becomed
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became
workaholic
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. The religion and social skills
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. These are all the results of modernisation. In conclusion, the old churches and iconic South Kensington houses must remain as they were before.
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will help
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our selves
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that we are
stil
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still
humans
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humans,
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not robots.

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task response
Your view is clear, but the reason with old buildings needs more strong, simple points that link to the task. Add a strong opening that states your view.
coherence
Link ideas inside and between paragraphs. Use simple join words like 'and', 'but', 'also', 'then' to show how ideas go together.
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Give a real example and show how it helps your point. Keep each paragraph to one idea and explain it with one or two simple sentences.
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The writer shows a strong view and stays with it.
coherence
Some idea of money from tourism and the good side of old buildings.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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