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Band 3

More and more students are choosing to study at colleges and universities in a foreign country. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, new advances
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system
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 and modern technology
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 significantly changed the lifestyle and education. The
students
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 can choose
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study
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to study
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 and work almost anywhere.
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 development offers considerable positive
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 certain negative
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impacts
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. One
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significant
 advantage is
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 personal freedom and improved quality of life. The increased ease of
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 abroad promotes cultural exchange, as
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students
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 can easily learn about different traditions and lifestyles. It
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 contributes
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 to
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 growth of the country.
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, foreign
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universities
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 and colleges offer
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 courses and job opportunities, which can help
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 international exposure and better career prospects.
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study in aboard
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studying abroad
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 helps
student
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students
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 develop a broader mindset and mutual understanding among nations.
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,
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 development has
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several drawbacks.
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 studying in
foreign
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a foreign
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 University
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challenges
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,
students
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 cannot afford their education fees, and their living expenses in other countries. They
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 from some health issues, and
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 of depression.
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,
students
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 who relocate to different cities or countries often feel isolated, because they stay far from their families and lose touch with their
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 roots. In conclusion,
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study
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foreign
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a foreign
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 University offer convenience and positive benefits to
students
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, it
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some
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 negative
impact
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impacts
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 on cultural identity and some challenges
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to
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face in foreign countries.

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task response
Choose one clear view and state it in the intro or conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Give a clear topic sentence in each paragraph and keep ideas in order.
coherence and cohesion
Fix grammar and spelling errors to make your meaning clear.
content
The essay shows a balance of advantages and disadvantages.
structure
There is a clear paragraph plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • abroad
  • study
  • student
  • college
  • university
  • language
  • culture
  • country
  • home
  • world
  • global
  • job
  • career
  • opportunity
  • growth
  • network
  • skills
  • experience
  • cost
  • money
  • loan
  • scholarship
  • visa
  • homesick
  • support
  • plan
  • choice
  • positive
  • negative
  • balance
  • access
  • equality
  • policy
  • help
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