The bar chart shows waste collection by a recycling centre from 2011 to 2015

The bar chart illustrates how much waste was gathered by a recycling centre during the years 2011 and 2015.
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, when paper
collection
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was dominant,
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while
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apply
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the garden gathering was dropped. In 2011, the paper was collected about 57 %, but
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was followed by a considerable drop to 40 % in 2013. Despite a considerable drop from 57 % to 40 % in two years, the
collection
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of paper increased notably to 70 % in 2015. The waste of glass
collection
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reduce
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slightly in 2012, but
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increased to 52 % in 2015. In 2011, the
tins
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was 35 %, but
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was followed by a
slightly
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drop, after which more
collected
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was collected
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further
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, further
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to 52 % in 2015. The waste
collection
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of
garden
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gardens
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started at 31 % in 2011, but
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was followed by a
sharply rose
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to 15 %
i8n
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in
2012. In 2013,
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figure
inreased
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increased
slightly to 35 % in 2015.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words collection with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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