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Ine some parts of the world, it is becoming in physically popular to try to find out the history of your own family.Why do you think people do this? Do you think it's a positive or negative development?

In
the
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recent years, there
is
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 a notable
tendenycy
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tendency
 that
people
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 in certain countries are
mush
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much
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 more eager to find out their family history, compared to before. I believe
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 movement is affected by a globalism expanding today and should be admitted positively. First of all,
thirst
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the thirst
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 for knowing one's identity is a natural trait that everyone
have
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.
People
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 always try to find out who they are, where they come from, and how they
raised
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were raised
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. In some cases, their quests
proceeds
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proceed
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 to their family background. By knowing
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 kind of aspects,
people
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 can understand themselves deeply
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, and
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 that really helps them set their personal goals that they want to achieve in their lifetime.
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, attention should be paid to
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globalized
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globalised
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 modern society surrounding us today. Thanks to the development of communication and transportation, interactions beyond borders and immigration to different countries have
became
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 much easier.
People
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 are no longer
stays
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staying
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 in one country and
highly
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are highly
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likeley
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likely
 to be immersed in
diversified
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a diversified
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,
multicultual
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multicultural
 environment.
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, after experiencing
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cultual caos
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cultural chaos
,
people
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 tend to have
strong
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a strong
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 desire to have
sense
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a sense
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 of belonging to
someting
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something
. In
this
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 context, seeking their
identitiy
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identity
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, inclucing
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inclucing
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including
 their family
history
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history,
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are
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is
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hilighted
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highlighted
.
To conclude
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, it is natural for everyone to try to know their
identitiy
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identity
, and
this
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 movement is turbocharged by
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a cultually
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cultually diviesified
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culturally diversified
 world. I am
storongly
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strongly
 for
this
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 movement, as it is rooted in human nature and recent global trends.

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planning
Plan your answer before you write. State your view in one line, then add two or three reasons.
language
Use simple, short sentences. Check again for spelling and grammar.
structure
Put a clear topic sentence in each paragraph. Use link words to show how ideas go together.
content
Give one or two clear examples to back up each idea.
content
The essay has a clear aim to discuss why people search for family history.
structure
There is a two part idea: identity and life in a global world.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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