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In many countries, there is a growing trend of food waste at both the consumer and production levels. What are the primary reasons behind this issue, and what practical steps can governments and individuals take to minimize food waste?

Recently, people used to waste
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food for some reasons in many countries. Most of them do not appreciate the value they have. To reduce
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this
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 trend, the governments and individuals should take
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steps together by
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 of awareness in everyone. And make them more helpful for
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their
 environment. There are a lot of reasons behind
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 issue, one of them is humen do not know where
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 put the excess food.
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 when they cook, the majority do not measure every amount they will need
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therefore
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, excess of edibles.
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, in every family gathering or parties, people used to serve their guests a different kind of edibles from the main dishes end of the desserts without taking into account the number of attendees. To
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 bad habit, our governments should put strict laws and make
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society more aware
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 the importance of saving dishes. One of the practical steps, putting
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boxes in
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public places with posters that
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 is the place where you can put the rest of your food.
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, when you do a
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 you have to know exactly how much the number of attendees and take that into
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account when you prepare the serving. In conclusion, to reduce
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individuals and governments must stick together to make a real change in the environment. They have to put it in their responsibility, appreciate
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 value and preserve it.
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, knowing the disadvantages of wasting dishes
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younger
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ages
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more
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better.

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planning
Make a plan before you write. Put your ideas in order: first reason, then effect, then fix.
coherence
Use simple links like first, next, also, and finally to show the order of ideas.
content
Be clear on the steps people can take. Give real actions that can be done by government and by people.
language
Check grammar and spelling, especially endings and article use, to make your writing easy to read.
structure
Keep to three paragraphs: one for intro, body, and conclusion, each with a single idea.
content
You have a real aim to cut waste and help the world.
tone
You try to give steps people can take.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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