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living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Living in a foreign
country
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 where you can’t speak your native
language
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 can cause some severe problems,
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 as discrimination or isolation.
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 essay strongly agrees with
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 point.
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, in
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 article, I will deliberate on my opinion.
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, you will feel isolated when you can not integrate into a society where
talk
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you cannot speak
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local
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the local
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 dialect without your local
language
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. It would mostly happen in student life. People usually refuse things that they are not familiar with, so the same situation would happen, especially living in a foreign
country
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 where you can’t speak your native
language
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, which can cause some severe problems,
such
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 as discrimination or isolation.
This
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 essay strongly agrees with
this
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 point.
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, in
this
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 article, I will deliberate on my opinion.y in the student community.
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, there are many interviews on YouTube that talk about their experience in foreign countries when they came from different
nationality
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nationalities
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.
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, it will become lonely and depressing.
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, it will be a barrier or obstacle in society.
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, living in a foreign
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, the fundamental request
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 survives. If you do not understand your daily life demands, it will become a practical issue.
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, when you need to deal with some problems, even just a little request, it's hard to talk to others when you can not speak the local
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.
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, a
language
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 barrier will become a crucial problem when you are living foreign area. In conclusion,
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 modern technology has greatly reduced
language
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 barriers and improved communication, it is still difficult for technology to replace direct human interaction and bridge the distance between people.
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, I believe that living in a
country
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 where a different
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 is spoken, without understanding the local
language
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, will inevitably lead to practical difficulties in daily life.

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Task response improvement
Plan your essay with a clear thesis, two to three main ideas, and a brief conclusion before you write.
Coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words to show how ideas connect and arrange ideas in clear order.
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Avoid repeating the same phrases; use different words and show examples or links to real life.
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Give concrete, simple examples and relate them directly to the idea you discuss.
Task response
The essay takes a clear stand on the topic.
Coherence
It discusses both social and practical effects of language problems.
Structure
Basic paragraphing is used with introduction, bodies, and a conclusion.
Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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