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The bar chart show the number of visitors to three Londan Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart illustrates the
number
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 of
people
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 visiting three different museums in the capital city of England from 2007 to 2012, comprising the National Gallery, the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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, and the British
Museum
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. It is obvious that in 2009, the total
number
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 of
people
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 who visited museums was at its lowest.
However
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, in comparison,
people
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 were more interested in visiting the National Gallery over the
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years
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.
On the other hand
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, the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 had fewer
visitors
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 than in the first two
years
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.
Moreover
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, for three
years
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,
visitors
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 to the British
Museum
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 decreased. The highest
number
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 of
people
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 visited the National Gallery in 2012, which was almost 17 million;
this
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 year
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 the highest
number
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 of
museum
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visitors
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 compared to the past five
years
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. The
years
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 2007 and 2008 shared the same figures for
people
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 visiting the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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, which was almost 13 million.
Besides
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this
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, visits to the British
Museum
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 fluctuated between
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7 to 9 million.
Lastly
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, the
number
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 of yearly
visitors
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 to the museums
initially
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 decreased from 2007 to 2009. After that,
visitors
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 gradually increased from 2009 to 2012.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, museum, years, visitors with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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