The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred.

The circular charts illustrate five different categories of fuel used in America from 1980
upto
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to
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1990.
Overall
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, over a period of a decade in the USA, the main sources of energy were oil, natural gas, hydroelectric power
as well
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as
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and
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nuclear power.
To begin
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with, oil was used mainly in both years of
1980s
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the 1980s
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and 1990s,
this
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was clearly shown in the graphs with 42% in 1980 and 33% in 1990, respectively.Meanwhile,
this
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was followed by the
source
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of natural gas with 26% and 25% over ten years.
Additionally
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, hydroelectric
was
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power was
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not used very well because they only spent 5 per cent and remained the same from 1980 until 1990.
On the other hand
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, coal drastically increased
with
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by
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5%
on
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during
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that period
,
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;
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the evidence is shown on the graph with 5 and 10 per cent in 1980 and 1990, respectively.To add on, the Americans
also
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used coal as a
source
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of energy
,
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;
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in 1980, they used 22% and in
1990
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1990,
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it was
constantlly
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constantly
increased to 27%.
Finally
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, people in the United States mainly use oil
all
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apply
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over
other any
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any other
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source
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of fuel
,
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;
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however
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however,
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the least
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source
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used source
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of energy that were used to
cook
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cooking
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and lighting is hydroelectric power.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words source with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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