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Scientists Say that in the future humanity will speak the same language. Do you think it’s a positive development or negative development?

It is widely accepted that a
language
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 is a prominent source of communication. Scientists have anticipated that in future, we might solely depend on
one
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language
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 for conversation as many school and workplaces prefers to use globally accepted
language
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. I strongly believe that it is a negative development as learning international
languages
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 is important in
this
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whereas
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 indigenous
languages
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also
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plays
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 a significant role
to display
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in displaying
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 the value of our culture
, reasons
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. Reasons
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 to support my perspective will be
ellucidated
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elucidated
 in the following paragraphs.
To begin
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 with, adopting
global
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a global
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language
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 for international co-operation is essential.
However
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, there are certain drawbacks associated with
this
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 practice. There are chances it might lead to local
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extinction
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;
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 every regional
language
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 has its own customs and values.
For example
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, in most countries, English is considered
as
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 globally spoken
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 because of which many learning institutions have included it in their academic Curriculum
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. This
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this
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 trend has reduced the importance of our indigenous
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 among young children.
Moreover
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,
this
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 preference might not only affect cultural identity
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 but
also
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dilutes
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dilute
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 cultural uniqueness.
As a result
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,
due to
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this
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trend
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one
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 dominant
language
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 and culture is overpowering the
essense
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essence
 of those who
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exist
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 at
minority
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a minority
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 level.
Furthermore
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, focusing primarily on
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 international
lingual
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lingua
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might
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franca might
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 deteriorate
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 the relevance of local
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one’s
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ones
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. Cultures are passed through
languages
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,
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 the
extinction
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 of a
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language
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language,
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 its culture is
also
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 most likely to disappear.
A research
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 conducted by
scientist
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scientists
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 found that nearly 2% of Regional
languages
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 are already
at
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on
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 the verge of
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. With the growing demand of multilingual individuals, many people are
also
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 inherently adopting
it's
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 cultures and rituals,
while
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 ignoring the value of their own local ones.
Therefore
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, it is a negative development, which can be addressed by educating children about
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its
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 importance. In conclusion,
although
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use
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the use
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 of particular
language
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 globally fosters social mobility, the widespread adoption of
one
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 dominant
language
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 can accelerate
language
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extinction
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,
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apply
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 and result in loss of cultural identity among minority communities.

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structure
Plan your essay before you write. Use a simple plan with an intro, two body parts, and a short end.
task
Say your view in the first part and restate it at the end.
content
Keep each paragraph on one main idea and add a small reason or example.
coherence
Use linking words to join ideas, like 'and', 'but', 'however', 'so'.
grammar
Check spelling and grammar. Use short, clear sentences.
task
Your view is clear.
content
You give reasons about language and culture.
coherence
There is an effort to make a plan and to show structure.
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