Some people think that men and women have differrnt qualities, therefore certain jobs are suitable for men and others for women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people think that women and
men
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have different qualities,and for
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they
are thinking
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think
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that certain
jobs
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can only fit women and others for
men
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,
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therefore
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therefore,
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I agree, and I
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will
explain why in
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essay. Some
jobs
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,
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apply
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require
a
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mental toughness
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how challenging they are.
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hard
jobs
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,
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apply
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can only fit
men
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. Soldiers
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who
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are fighting on the
battle field
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,
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had
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been through rough training for years till they are
finally
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ready to go out and do their job. A job that could kill them at any given second,
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therefore
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therefore,
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many soldiers
still
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are still
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suffering trauma till today.
On the other hand
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,
jobs
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that can only be done by women
,
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also
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require hard work and attention to the smallest details.
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, fashion design. A job
that is
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also
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mentally draining when it comes to
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choosing
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the right
colors
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colours
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for the right time,combining all that with traditions and
clutures
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cultures
to
creat
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create
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something unique and special. In conclusion, I agree that
men
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and
wome
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women
have
a
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apply
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very different qualities, and for that, certain
jobs
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are suitable only for
men
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and others for
woman
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women
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.

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planning
Be clear on your view in the intro. If you say you agree, keep to that view in the rest of the essay and explain more.
coherence
Use linking words to show how ideas go together, such as also, but, however, for example, and then.
grammar
Use short, simple sentences. Break long ideas into two or three short sentences.
content
Your topic is clear and you offer examples.
structure
There is a closing paragraph that restates your view.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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