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The line graph below gives information about the number of visitors to three London museums between June and September 2013. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates the number of
visitors
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 to three London museums during the period from
June
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 to September 2013.
Overall
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,
while
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 the three museums exhibited fluctuating trends throughout the given period, each experienced both upward and downward movements at different times.
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, the extent and frequency of these fluctuations varied among them. As the line graph shows, in
June
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, the Science Museum stood at 400,000
visitors
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 and continued to drop rapidly to over 300,000
visitors
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 in August.
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, it rose considerably to reach above 400,000
visitors
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 by September.
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, the Natural History Museum began
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 approximately 550,000
visitors
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 in
June
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 and fell slowly until August.
Thereafter
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, it grew fast to slightly under 500,000
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at the end
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 of the period.
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, the British Museum commenced at 600,000
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 in
June
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, maintained an upward trend to almost 750,000
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 in July,
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 went down drastically to 500,000
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 in August.
Subsequently
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, it increased drastically to more than 600,000
visitors
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, june with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • line graph
  • illustrates
  • number of visitors
  • museums
  • from June to September 2013
  • the British Museum
  • the Natural History Museum
  • the Science Museum
  • overall trend
  • attracted
  • the most visitors
  • fewest visitors
  • peak
  • experienced fluctuations
  • decline
  • highlight
  • dominance
  • consistent decline
  • minor resurgence
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