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Writing Samples
Band 2

Some people think that trees should be planted in vacant areas in towns and cities, while others say homes should be built instead. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

Some people
believed
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believe
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 that
planted
Wrong verb form
planting
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 trees in empty places of the town is essential,
while
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 others
belive
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believe
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 we should build
houses
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instead
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 of it. On one hand, planted
tress
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trees
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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 very helpful for
the
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apply
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society and
citizens
Correct pronoun usage
its citizens
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. It gives us clear air to
breath
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breathe
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 and astonishing views.
In addition
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, planting trees
mean
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
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 more parks, which make
cheldren
Correct your spelling
children
 and adults have more places to have fun and relax.
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Also
Add a comma
Also,
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 it’s very imperative to
evolved
Wrong verb form
evolve
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 the communication in
this
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 society.
For instance
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, when
chidrern
Correct your spelling
children
 go out to the
parks
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parks,
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 they meet each
others
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other
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 and that
develop
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develops
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the Harmonious
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harmony
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 in
this
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 generation, and
this
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create
Correct subject-verb agreement
creates
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 a superb environment.
In
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On
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other
Correct article usage
the other
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 hand,
build
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building
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a
Correct article usage
apply
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houses
Use synonyms
 is very practical
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, which
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which
Correct word choice
as
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It
Fix capitalization
it
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 makes
an
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the
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 environment
works
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work
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moreover
Punctuation problem
; moreover
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,
build
Wrong verb form
building
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houses
Use synonyms
mean
Correct subject-verb agreement
means
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more
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a larger
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 population in the community, which
and
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apply
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It
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apply
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has significant consequences.
For example
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,
it’s
Verb problem
it
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offer
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offers
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 more employment
and
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, and
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 it is very efficient to enhance the economy in the country. In my opinion, I
belive
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believe
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build
Wrong verb form
building
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houses
Use synonyms
 is the best
choes
Correct your spelling
choice
, because in
this
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 era of time the necessity of employment has evolved rapidly.

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grammar
Fix the grammar and spelling in many sentences so the meaning is clear.
structure
Make a clear start with a simple introduction that states the topic and your view. End with a short conclusion.
organization
Use one idea per paragraph. Start with a topic sentence and add a small example.
cohesion
Use linking words to show how ideas fit together, like 'first', 'also', 'however', 'for this reason'.
vocabulary
Keep words simple and correct. Check spellings that change the meaning (tree, child, other).
development
Give a real example that supports each point. Try to explain why it matters.
task
The essay tries to cover both sides and to give an opinion.
content
There are some good ideas about air and parks and about jobs and economy.
structure
There are some good linking phrases, like 'on one hand', though not used perfectly.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trees
  • green space
  • air
  • clean
  • shade
  • cool
  • health
  • mood
  • birds
  • animals
  • people
  • homes
  • houses
  • buildings
  • land
  • space
  • empty
  • plan
  • planning
  • grow
  • city
  • town
  • life
  • future
  • safe
  • noise
  • traffic
  • jobs
  • money
  • nature
  • rule
  • balance
  • mix
  • park
  • garden
  • roof garden
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