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The chart below shows the book sales for five different types of fiction books from 2006 to 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Shyngys

The bar chart provides key information about the gross earnings from selling young adult, classics, mystery, romance and sci-fi&fantasy
books
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 over the course of 4 years,from 2006 to 2010.The units are measured in dollars.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that the romance
books
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 were the highest throughout the interval.
In addition
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, Mystery
books
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 were the second highest ,
whereas
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 the other types of
books
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 were approximately near each other.
According to
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 what is shown,Romance
books
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 introduced more than 80000 in 2006.
Then
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 it soared to the peak in 2007 and decreased sharply to 70000 after that.
At the end
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, it increased steadily until it reached about 83000.
While
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 Selling Mystery book began at 60000.After that, it grew to more than 80000.
Finally
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, it dropped to about 5500 and approximately remained. In terms of selling young adult
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,it began at around 2700 and fluctuated until it reached 2500.At the same pattern, the selling of sci-fi&fantasy
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 started at about 1700 and fluctuated until it reached 1600.
While
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 the selling of classics was introduced in 1800 and rose to 2500 in the second year.
Finally
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, it dropped to 5000.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "finally, while".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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