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The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.

The line graph below compares the Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US dollar.
The line graph shows changes in Gross Domestic Product (GDP) in four countries in billions of US
dollars
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 over the
period
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.
Overall
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,
Pakistan
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 and Bangladesh experienced significant increases,
whereas
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 Malaysia and Nepal remained relatively stable throughout the
period
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. In detail, looking first at
Pakistan
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,
it is clear that
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 the country recorded one of the highest figures. GDP in
Pakistan
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 showed a noticeable increase over the
period
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, rising steadily from 190
billion
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 to 290
billion
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dollars
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.
By contrast
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, Nepal showed little variation and remained relatively stable, with only minor fluctuations during the
period
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. Turning to the remaining countries, Bangladesh demonstrated a continuous upward trend, increasing from around 100
billion
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 to 250
billion
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dollars
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. Malaysia,
however
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, experienced relatively minor fluctuations. Its GDP reached a peak in 2012 but
then
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 fell gradually from 350
billion
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 to 300
billion
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dollars
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 by the end of the
period
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.
Overall
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, the differences between the countries were clearly visible, with
Pakistan
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 and Bangladesh showing remarkable growth
while
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 Malaysia and Nepal remained largely stable.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dollars, period, pakistan, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gross Domestic Product
  • economic performance
  • growth rate
  • stagnation
  • trend analysis
  • fluctuations
  • economic boom
  • recession
  • industrial sectors
  • projection
  • fiscal policy
  • economic indicator
  • per capita income
  • purchasing power parity
  • upward trend
  • downturn
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