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You are attending a course at an evening school. Write a letter to the director of the school with a complaint about the course. In your letter, you should: – Describe the course you are taking. – Explain what you don’t like about the course. – Give your opinion about what should be done about it.

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to complaint regarding the Ielts general classes.   Actually, I want to get
PR
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a PR
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. That's why
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apply
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 I need each module triple 7
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, and
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 I have already filled my exam.
However
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, I was attending speaking, writing, and reading classes from
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 week, but
instructor
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the instructor
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 is not attending
reading
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the reading
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 and writing module courses, even
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though they
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 give homework.
Moreover
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,
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the speaking
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 tutor
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did
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 not give feedback and did not find any mistakes. I am
realy
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really
 worried about my exam. I humbly request give instructions to
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the tutor
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, so they can focus on classes. I look forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Preet

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language
Fix grammar and spelling to make the meaning clear. For example, use 'to complain' and 'I have already booked the exam.'
structure
Use one clear idea in each paragraph. Start with the course, then give your issues, then ask for a plan of action.
content
Be specific about the action you want, such as a meeting or a plan to improve the course.
tone
Keep a formal tone and avoid casual phrases.
closing
End with a clear request and your contact details.
structure
The letter has a proper greeting and closing.
content
The letter states why the course matters to you.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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