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The maps show the park which was built in 1920 and current construction of the park.

The floormap gives the information regarding changes that happened in the Grange
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park
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Park
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 since 1920 until now. From the
eldon street
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Eldon Street
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 entrance, Grange
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park
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Park
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 was divided into three parts
,
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such
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 as the
righthand
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side
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 with the water establishment, the middle part, where both entrances are located, and the
lefthand
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left-hand
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side
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, which held music-related activities. When it first opened, the
righthand
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side
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 used to have a rose
garden
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 close
close
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to the
arnold avenue
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Arnold Avenue
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 entrance and a glasshouse with additional
seats
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 on the opposite
.
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side.
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 Both
feature
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features
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 got replaced with
cafe
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a cafe
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 and
playground
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a playground
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, respectively,
while
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 the pond was modified and moved from the corner near
rose
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the rose
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garden
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 to the place where
glasshouse
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the glasshouse
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 used to
belong
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be
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.
Moreover
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, an access for
underground
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the underground
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 car
park
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 was added near the water feature, replacing the
seats
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 in the process. Moving on to the
center
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centre
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 part of the
park
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, both
entrance
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entrances
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 stayed the same throughout the years,
although
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 there
was
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were
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 a few changes in the middle.
Fountain
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A fountain
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 in between the entrances used to decorate the
park
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. Prior to the
lefthand
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left-hand
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side
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 changes, the fountain was replaced with
rose
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a rose
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garden
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 and added with some
seats
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.
On the other hand
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, the
lefthand
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left-hand
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side
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, which the
amphitheater
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amphitheatre
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 belongs to, used to only have a regular stage before it was changed to a dedicated
theater
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theatre
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 intended for concerts. Meanwhile, the rose
garden
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 near the
eldon street
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Eldon Street
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 was moved
along with
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 the
seats
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 to the
center
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centre
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.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park, side, garden, seats with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "moved" was used 2 times.
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