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The line graph below shows US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.

The graph gives information about the US consumers' average annual expenditures on cell
phone
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 and residential
phone
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 service during the period from 2001 to 2010.
Overall
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,
while
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 the two services exhibited different trends over the given period, one followed an upward trajectory,
whereas
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 the other showed a decline.
However
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, the rates of increase and decrease varied significantly between them. As the line graph shows, in 2001, the cell
phone
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 service stood at $200 and maintained an upward trend to reach around $300 in 2002,
then
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 increased slowly to slightly over $300 in 2003.
Subsequently
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, rose dramatically to more than $700
at the end
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 of the period.
By contrast
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, the residential
phone
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 service began at slightly under $700 in 2001, and continued to fall drastically to approximately $550 in 2006.
Thereafter
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, dropped rapidly to almost $400 by 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phone with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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