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The line graph shows the number of players in four different sports in a particular European country between 1985 and 2005.

The graph gives information about the number of
players
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 in four different sports in a particular European country during the period from 1985 to 2005.
Overall
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,
while
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 the four sports exhibited different trends over the given period, one followed an upward trajectory,
whereas
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 the other
one
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showed a decline.
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, participation in Basketball and badminton remained relatively stable throughout the years. As the line graph shows, in 1985, the number of tennis
players
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 stood at 150 and maintained an upward trend to over 200
players
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 in 1995,
then
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 grew slowly to slightly over 200
players
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 in 2005.
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 the Rugby , it began
at
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with
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 slightly under 250
players
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 in 1985 and continued to fall moderately until it reached 200
players
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 in 1995.
Thereafter
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, it went down dramatically to 50
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 by 2005. Regarding
the
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Basketball and badminton, both commenced
at
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with
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 approximately 60
players
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 and nearly 50
players
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 in 1985.
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, both figures followed the same general pattern until the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words players with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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