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the graph below shows the percentage of population in cities since 1970s with projections to 2030

The graph gives information about the percentage of the population in cities during the
period
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 from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
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,
while
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 the four countries exhibited different trends throughout the given
period
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, they all experienced an
overall
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 upward trajectory.
However
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, the pace of growth varied, with some countries showing a more rapid increase than others. As the line graph shows, in 1970, India's urban population started at 20% and stayed the same until 1990 and is expected to increase moderately , reaching under 40% by 2030.
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, China began at 20% in 1970.
Subsequently
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, it continued to follow the same general pattern until 1990.
Thereafter
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, it is predicted to grow drastically to approximately 65% by the end of the
period
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.
By contrast
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, Korea stood at 40% in 1970, and maintained an upward trend, to slightly under 90% by 2030. Regarding the USA, it commenced at 70% in 1970 and rose dramatically to nearly 90%
at the end
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 of the
period
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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