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There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this have led to significant improvements in peoples live. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

In recent decades, technological development has transformed human life dramatically. I strongly agree that these advances have led to significant improvements in people’s lives.
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, technology has revolutionised communication. With the invention of smartphones and the internet, people can connect instantly across the world.
This
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 has made communication faster, easier, and more efficient, strengthening both personal and professional relationships.
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, online education and remote work have created new opportunities for learning and employment.
Secondly
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, technological progress has greatly improved healthcare. Modern medical equipment and digital systems help doctors diagnose and treat diseases more effectively.
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, life expectancy has increased
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 many illnesses can now be managed or cured.
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, technology
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 has some drawbacks,
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 as overdependence on digital devices and reduced physical activity. Despite these concerns, the
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 benefits outweigh the disadvantages. In conclusion, technological advancements have considerably enhanced people’s quality of life, making modern living more convenient, connected, and efficient.

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structure
Make your main idea clear in one line at the start and keep each paragraph to one idea.
coherence
Use linking words to tie ideas, like moreover, however, also, and finally.
content
Add more real examples or facts to back up key points.
structure
Clear position and easy to read.
coherence
Good use of intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Relevant ideas such as talking about communication and health.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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