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Band 4

There have been major advances in technology over recent decades and this have led to significant improvements in peoples live. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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the
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recent
years
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years,
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 major developments
has
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have
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 taken place in
technical
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the technical
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 sector
which
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, which
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 resulted in several
advancement
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advancements
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 in
the
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society. The changes in
people
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's
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life
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lives
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 will be
discused
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discussed
 in the upcoming
paragraphs
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paragraphs,
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 followed by my opinion.
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 with, technology has become
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a crutial
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crutial
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crucial
 part in human interaction with each other who
lives
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live
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 long
distance
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distances
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. To explain, a high number of population
use
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 smartphones to interact with each other weather for personal or professional
use
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.
This
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 resulted in better connection with the world and
eliminate
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 the barrier of distance in communication.
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, a person living overseas can
easy
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easily
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 make a phone call to his loved ones
backhome
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back home
.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, different countries
has
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have
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 become one nation to have universal functioning of the societies. To understand
this
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, in olden times
people
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use
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used
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learn
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to learn
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 skills and expand
it
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them
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 to other parts of the world, which usually
take
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took
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 months to
came
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come
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in
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into
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 existence.
However
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, any development, policies and scientific research nowadays is more quickly adapted and executed.
In addition
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, major advancements in technology benefited
healthcare
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the healthcare
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 sector which
results
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resulting
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 in better treatment of the patients.
For example
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, health problems can be
indentified
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identified
 at early stages with the help of
machiens
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machines
 like ECG, ultrasound and X-rays.
As a result
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, human
life
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 span increases with technological development.
Last
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 but not
the
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least,
mannual
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manual
 workload of
people
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 has been drastically decreased. Advancements like microwave,
vaccum
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vacuum
 cleaner, induction,
electrical
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electric
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 cars and computers made
life
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 easier for
the
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humans. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement that technology has improved the lifestyle of
people
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.
Although
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,
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apply
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 I believe excessive
use
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 of it can cause disadvantages like time waste and
lack
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a lack
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 of creative thinking in humans.
To conclude
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, there are
number
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a number
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 of benefits of
tecnology
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technology
 in
individual's
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an individual's
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 daily
life
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like
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, like
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increase
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an increase
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 in
long distance
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long-distance
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 communication, better medical facilities and reduced
mannual
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manual
 labour.

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structure
Plan your essay with a clear start, middle and end. Use a few link words to join ideas.
grammar
Check grammar and spelling to make your message clear.
content
Give one or two good examples and explain how they show your point.
organization
Stick to one main idea per paragraph and use small, easy words.
content
You show a clear view that technology helps life.
coherence
You give ideas about long distance talk and health devices.
content
Some example ideas are mentioned, like ECG or vacuum cleaner.
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