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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time this summer. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, -Explain why you think he/she would enjoy a camping holiday -Describe some possible disadvantages -Say whether you would like to go camping with him/her.

Dear Smith, I hope you are doing well. I received your letter and felt excited to know that you are going on a vacation to camp. I understand
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 is your first time
to experience
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experiencing
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such
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 an
advanturous
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adventurous
 activity.
However
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, I would recommend
you
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that you
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to
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apply
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fully enjoy your time over there. Take full advantage to connect with
the
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nature and enjoy
in
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learning about how to ignite fire with rocks.
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,
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 it is a
thrilled
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thrilling
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 experience but it
also
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come
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comes
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 with
few
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a few
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 drawbacks. I would suggest you
to
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keep
you
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your
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bon-fire
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bonfire
 lit
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sleep
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sleeping
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 to avoid any wildlife attack.
In addition
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 to
this
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, be
extremly
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extremely
 careful
while
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 stepping out of
tent
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the tent
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 at night. As
,
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 Bluemountain camping site is close to the water, there are high chances of mosquito presence. So, be aware to carry full sleeves shirts in
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 hot and humid climate. I appreciate
you
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that you
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 asked me to give you company. I would love to join you in
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advanture
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adventure
but
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, but
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unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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 I have my important work meeting in the same week
because
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, because
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 of
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this
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I am unable to come. I wish you good
luch
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luck
 for your holidays and don't forget to give my love to your parents. With warm regards, Reet Sharma

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grammar
Fix big spelling and grammar errors.
structure
Use one idea in each paragraph.
vocabulary
Use short, clear words and short sentences.
coherence
Make links between ideas with simple words like and, but, so.
tone
The letter keeps a friendly tone.
content
You tell why camping can be fun.
structure
You say you would join but you have work.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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