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Writing Samples
Band 5.5

You are living in a city in a foreign country and a friend from your home country is soon coming to visit your for several days. Write an letter

Dear Amantha, I hope you are doing well. I recently heard that you are coming to Canada
for spending
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 your summer vacation. I am extremely overwhelmed with
this
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 news. I assure you will be happy and satisfied with your visit to Toronto.
Although
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,
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apply
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 I
am
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have been
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 living in
this
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 city
since
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for
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 5 years, it still manages to surprise me every time I
went
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go
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 out looking for adventure. I am planning to show you all the famous tourist attractions
;
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,
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 including
CN
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the CN
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tower
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Tower
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,
Aquarium
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the Aquarium
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,
Thousand
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the Thousand
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island
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Islands
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 and
Blue-mountain
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Blue Mountain
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. I would like to be your host during your stay. We have one guest room in our house, which I
already
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have already
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 started to arrange
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 your liking and needs.
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, my mother is excited to cook delicious food for you. She even made a list of your favourite dishes!
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, I would appreciate it if you
bring
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brought
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 Besan laddoo from
back-home
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back home
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. I always miss them here. I am looking forward
hearing
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to hearing
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 from you. Give my regards to your family! With regards, Reem Sheikh

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grammar
Some phrases have wrong word form. Use 'I have lived here for five years' and 'I go out' instead of 'I went out' and 'every time I went out looking for adventure.'
structure
Put one idea in each paragraph. Right now some paragraphs have more than one idea.
vocabulary
Use the right articles with place names: 'the CN Tower', 'the Thousand Islands', 'Blue Mountain'.
coherence
Use small linking words to join ideas, like 'and', 'also', 'then' to help flow.
tone
Keep the tone warm and polite as you write to a friend.
spelling
Check spelling and punctuation, for example 'back home' (not 'back-home').
tone
Friendly and warm tone to invite your friend.
content
Clear plan to show major places in Toronto.
content
Offer to host is clear and kind.
content
Mention of family and food adds warmth.
Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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