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Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The diagram below shows what an office building looks at present and plans on future development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The maps show how
Office
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the Office
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 building will change
since
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over
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recent
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the recent
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 period.
Overall
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, the number of
offices
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 is
due to
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 remain unchanged,
through
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though
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 they will be bigger in size and rearranged.
This
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 change will come at the expense of dining spaces.
Finally
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,
grass
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the grass
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area
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go
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goes
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 with social spaces
taking
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, taking
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 their places.
Nowadays
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Nowadays,
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 the layout of
this
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 building starts with
entrance
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the entrance
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,
at
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on
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 the left-hand
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side
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side,
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 there are 4
offices
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,which are installed with
partition
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a partition
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wall
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. At the left-hand
side
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corner
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corner,
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 there is a grass
area
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.
This
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area
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 stretches along the left
wall
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 of the Office building. Dining areas are opposite to
offices
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,and
storeroom
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the storeroom
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 with
toilet
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a toilet
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are
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is
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 nearby. Another grass
area
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 is
at
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on
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 the left
side
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wall
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 of the diagram. In the future, the main entrance will
flank
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be flanked
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with
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by
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 two
offices
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. On the
left hand
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left-hand
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Use synonyms
wall
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wall,
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 there will be
sitting
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a sitting
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area
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( outdoor seating
area
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 and chairs).
Other
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The other
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 two
offices
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 will be located in front of
main
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the main
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 entrance. Storeroom will remain intact. At the left-hand
side
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corner
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corner,
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 there will be
toilet
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a toilet
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. In the remaining empty spaces on the right
side
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 of the
building
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building,
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 there will be located chairs,
meeting
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a meeting
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area
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 and
coffee
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a coffee
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 machine between
storeroom
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the storeroom
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 and
toilet
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the toilet
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words offices, area, side, wall with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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