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traffic and housing problems in major cities should be solved by moving large companies and factories and their employees to the counryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

While
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 it has been discussed that relocating big corporations and
factories
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 with their workforce to the
counryside
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countryside
, in order to resolve
traffic
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 and housing issues in key cities, I strongly disagree with
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. Housing and
traffic
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 problems can be solved by
infastructure
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infrastructure
 and real
estate
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 development.
To begin
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 with, the government should invest more in developing the
infastructure
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infrastructure
 of the
citites
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cities
 to solve
traffic
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 issues,
instead
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 of moving companies and
factories
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. To illustrate, improving public
transportaion
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transportation
,
such
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 as metro and buses, can help
reducing
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reduce
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 heavy
traffic
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. Citizens can rely on public
transporation
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transportation
 in their daily lives,
espeacially
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especially
 when going to work.
For instance
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, Saudi Arabia invested billions of dollars to build metro and bus stations, with the goal of decreasing the number
people
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of people
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 who mainly rely on cars for
transporation
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transportation
.
As a result
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,
traffic
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 percentages went down significantly by 50% in 2025 in the capital of Saudi Arabia,
Riaydh
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Riyadh
, since the activation of public transportation.
Furthermore
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, real
estate
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improvment
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improvement
 can play a
cruical
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crucial
 role in reducing housing problems,
such
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 as high prices of rents and the lack of facilities. Governments should invest in building houses and communities with affordable prices to citizens, rather than spending these funds on the relocation of
factories
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, which can require even more budget.
Moreover
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,
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this
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these
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 investments will greatly improve the quality of life of the citizens in major cities.
For example
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, Roshen real
estate
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 company in Saudi Arabia,
in
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apply
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which
it
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apply
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is a government-owned company, is working on building several communities around the country, providing all facilities and services needed by homeowners in one place with
a
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apply
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very
convinient
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convenient
 prices. These facilities
includes
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include
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,
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apply
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 schools, supermarkets, and play areas for kids. Ultimately, improving the quality of life and providing housing solutions. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
traffic
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 and housing issues can
solved
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be solved
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 by public transportation and real
estate
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improvemnts
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improvements
, by spending less amount of money
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that
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than
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 is needed to move huge companies and
factories
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.

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task response
Task response: You show a clear view, and you give two reasons. To make it stronger, add a view from the other side and show more depth to each reason.
coherence
Coherence: The essay is easy to follow and you use some link words. Use a clear topic sentence in each paragraph and connect ideas with simple linking words like first, also, but, finally.
position clarity
Clear stance against moving big firms.
example usage
Use of examples to show how transport and homes can be better with other work.
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