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The pictures show the changes of a park from 1980 to the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pictures illustrate how a public park has changed from 1980 to the present day.
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 has been significantly redesigned, with the removal of the surrounding wall, the addition of new recreational facilities, and a more complex network of footpaths. In 1980, the park was enclosed by a brick wall and had a single gated entrance decorated with daisies. A curved path ran through the centre, dividing the space into two sections. The left side contained a small pond surrounded by several benches,
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 the right side featured a group of large trees. Today, the park is open on all sides, as both the wall and gate have been removed and replaced with low shrubs. The original single path has been replaced by four straight walkways that intersect in the middle, creating four distinct zones. The lower-right
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 now contains a football pitch,
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 the upper-right section has been converted into a picnic
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 with tables, benches, and decorative trees. The pond remains in the lower-left quadrant,
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 fewer benches are provided, and the upper-left
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 has been cleared of its previous features.

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task response
Give a short opening that says what changed and why it is clear.
content
The essay shows the main change well.
structure
Use time words to show the two times clearly.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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