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The graph shows the differencies in wheat export over the three areas

The line graph illustrates
wheat
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 exports in three different areas between 1985 to 1990.
Overall
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, except
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Canada
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for Canada
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, all the countries were almost steady at the beginning of the year.
Also
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,
Canada
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 was the highest country that exported
wheat
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 than the other parts. In 1988,
Canada
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 showed a significant rise in overseas cereal sales.
While
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 Australia and European communities fluctuated from 1985 to 1988 in
grain
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the grain
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 trade.
In contrast
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, Australia showed a noticeable decrease
the
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in the
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 shipment of
wheat
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 abroad in 1990, which was the lowest.
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, the European community saw an upward trend between 1989 to 1990,
while
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Canada
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 showed a significant drop in exportation in 989. In 1990,
Canada
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 gained back some of the sales of the
wheat
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words wheat, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • export
  • wheat
  • trade
  • produce
  • agricultural commodity
  • volume
  • metric tonnes
  • economic impact
  • fluctuation
  • trend
  • domestic market
  • international market
  • export quota
  • trade barriers
  • comparative advantage
  • seasonal variation
  • supply chain
  • harvest
  • yield
  • competition
  • sustainability
  • forecast
  • logistics
  • subsidy
  • tariff
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