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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their pwn country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development.

Actually,
students
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differert
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different
part
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parts
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 of the world have more
opportunity
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opportunities
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 than
students
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 in the past. Now, I´m going to explain my opinion about
these
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this
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 situation. On one hand, the
advantanges
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advantages
 that
students
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 contribute to
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study
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studying
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 abroad
is
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different
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a different
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 type of education, that
students
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develop
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to develop
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 different knowledge
more
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, more
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 advanced
that
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than
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 in Peru. In my opinion, the
technology
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 is one important
fact
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 in
this
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 situation, because you can
study
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 without leaving your country.
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, Spain offers
differents
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different
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course
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courses
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 in the virtual modality, you don´t need
travel
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to travel
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 to Spain to take the
course
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, just need your phone, tablet or computer to
enter to
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join
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 the
classmate
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class
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.
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, the disadvantages that
students
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study
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studying
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 abroad, the
atenttion
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attention
 for the virtual modality. The
students
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 don´t learn
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, the reason is distraction with
differents
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 objects.
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, the class
start
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 and the
students
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is
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are
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 playing with their
phone
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. In my opinion, the
technology
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 is important in the present
from
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the
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education, because
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it enhanse
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enhanse
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enhances
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education
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of education
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 in the world. Nowadays,
due to
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technology
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differents
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differences
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students
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, students
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 can
study
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 a
carrer
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career
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course
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international
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internationally
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 more
easly
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easily
 than in the past.
However
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,
students
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 can get distracted more
easly
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easily
. In conclusion,
students
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 have more access to different
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course
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courses
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 around the world with just one click. The advance of the
technology
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 offers a lot of things, but they have to
know
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apply
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use with wisely.

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structure
Plan your answer first. Use one idea per paragraph and start with a clear topic sentence.
cohesion
Use simple linking words like and, but, also, for example to show how ideas go together.
task
Give clearer facts or facts from life to back your point and stay on one idea per paragraph.
content
The essay shows two sides, which fits the task.
structure
It uses on one hand and on the other hand to show contrast.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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