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Some experts claim that it is important to teach children the skill of handwriting. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is often argued that it is crucial to teach young people handwriting
skills
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While
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 some experts find it as an essential skill for
children
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, others disagree
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that
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apply
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. I firmly agree that handwriting is fundamental, as it enables
children
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 to be more talented and smart.
To begin
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 with, handwriting significantly improves the way of thinking. Which means it focuses on activating the source of ideas in the brain, especially in
children
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While
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children
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 tend to be fast learners and have fresh minds, it is important to benefit from
early
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 stages of development by teaching them handwriting
skills
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 in school. For
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, a study showed that students with handwriting
skills
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 usually have much higher IQ than
children
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 who are used to
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in
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on
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 computers.
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,
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 skill plays a vital
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for
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in
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 being more
intelligant
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intelligent
.
Furthermore
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,
children
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 who are talented in artworks, always work with their hands.
Moreover
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, activating the link between hands and brain
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 leads to
much
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 stronger connection between physical senses
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, which
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encourage
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encourages
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 being more creative.
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, the most famous artists are from old generations, before
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the introducing
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introducing
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technology
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of technology
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 and computers, as they used to rely on their hands in painting and writing.
In addition
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,
such
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 artworks are
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extremely
 unique and are being sold for thousands of dollars,
due to
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 the artwork being handmade or handwritten. In conclusion, handwriting
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plays
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 a crucial role in developing a variety of
skills
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 in
children
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, in terms of encouraging
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the generating
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generating
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ideas
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of ideas
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 in artworks and increasing the brain functions to be more
intelligant
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intelligent
.

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task
Keep to one main idea in each paragraph and give a clear reason for it.
task
Avoid extra topics not tied to handwriting, like art sales. Stick to your main goal.
coherence
Use linking words to show flow, such as 'also', 'because', 'so', and 'but'.
language
Make short and clear sentences. Check spellings and fix easy errors.
content
The essay shows a clear view that handwriting is important.
structure
There is a plan with an intro, body, and conclusion.
content
Some examples are used to back points.
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