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Advantages and disadvantages about working remotely from home

Nowadays, it is increasingly typical for people in various regions of the world to
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 has both pros and cons. In
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 has a number of advantages
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 more control over their schedule.
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 system can lead to
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life .
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 my aunt has a small child
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 working from home , she
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 takes care of her child. In my
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 remote
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 is especially beneficial for mothers.
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, one of the most significant disadvantages of remote
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. Workers get easily distracted by certain things, like household tasks, family members or even pets.
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 they can't
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 on their
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, more people face
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at home. To
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 remote
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 has a lot of benefits, I personally believe that
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 it has some drawbacks.

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task response
Give a clear view and close with your own stance. State your position in the opening or closing line and keep it. Add more detail and a stronger balance of ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Put ideas in a clear order. Use simple linking words like and, but, also. Start each paragraph with a clear topic sentence.
content
The topic is easy to read and you show both sides.
structure
You give a small real example which helps.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Remote work
  • Telecommuting
  • Home office
  • Flexible schedule
  • Productivity
  • Cost-effective
  • Isolation
  • Burnout
  • Work-life balance
  • Technical disruptions
  • Commuting
  • Distractions
  • Connectivity
  • Collaboration
  • Autonomy
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