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the bar charts give information about the salaries and university fees of students from three universities in two spheres-Law and Business Summatise the information by selcting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevent.

The bar charts compare the average
salaries
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 of Law and Business graduates from three universities (A,
B
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, and
C
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) and the
tuition
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 fees they are required to pay.
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,
Tuition
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 fees are consistently higher than the average salary across all schools and fields.
School
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B
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 has the highest
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 in both fields,
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school
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School
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 A has the lowest, and
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school
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School
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C
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 has the biggest disparity. In law
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school
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school,
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 A has a balanced income of $40,000, covering both
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 and
salaries
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.
School
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B
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 has the highest
tuition
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 ratio at $60,000 and
salary
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at
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of
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 $40,000.
School
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C
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 has the biggest difference in
tuition
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 fees, with some schools charging around 55,000 and others around 40,000. In Business
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school
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school,
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 A has the lowest salary at $30,000 and
tuition
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 at $40,000.
School
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B
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 has the highest
salaries
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 at $40,000 and
tuition
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 at $50,000.
School
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C
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 has the highest
tuition
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, around $60,000, and
salaries
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 of $40,000.

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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words salaries, b, c, tuition, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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