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Band 3.5

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012.

The graph illustrates the modıfication
on
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of
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burdary
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boundary
,car theft,robbery
of
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, of
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 criminal
case
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cases
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 in Manchester city
center
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centre
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 between 2003 and 2012. It is crystal seen that car theft experienced
a
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an
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 increase a
grow
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grew
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up
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apply
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,opposite was true for
burdary
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burglary
which
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, which
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happen
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experienced
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 a drop
through
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during
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 the period ,with the exception of robbery . In the
initial
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initial,
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 we observed
robery
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robbery
 and
burdary
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burglary
 was
increase
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an increase
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of
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in
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 crime
report
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reports
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.
End of the year
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End-of-the-year
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 car theft was
the
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a
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commonly
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common
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 happen in Manchester city
center
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centre
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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