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Band 4

Some people believe that children should be given homework every day, while others think that it is not necessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, society faces
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numerous
 challenges in everyday life. People
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 these
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 from different perspectives, which gives rise to debates between
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contrasting
 viewpoints. In
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whether some
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 people believe that students should give
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daily
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while
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 others think that it isn´t necessary. In the following paragraphs, I will present my point of view on
this
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 issue. On one hand, the idea of
homework
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 daily for
children
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 keeps in activity the mind of the child
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active and
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have
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has
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responsabilites
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responsibilities
 after
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school. It´s a great idea that the
children
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 still
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practice
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 their courses in the house, to understand more if they
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make
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some
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any
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 mistakes
about
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 the course.
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,
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if
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 a child
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wants
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 to learn more about a course,
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they can
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 do
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 to
have
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gain
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 the knowledge.
On the other hand
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, the point of view about
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don´t
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not doing
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homework
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everyday
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every day
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 of the week,
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I
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 think that the house is a place to rest and relax for
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 activities realised
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during
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 the day. The
children
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 need to play and get
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distracted
 because if the
children
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 have
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a healthy
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 mind,
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it could
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 give stress. In the news appear a case
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 the
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 of
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stress,
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stadistics
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statistics
inform
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show
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 that
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stress has increased
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 the stress in
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children
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, the reason is that they
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 sports and play in
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their free
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times
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time
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. In conclusion, the
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 of
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homework
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 is determinant. Because the
children
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 keep in
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activity
 their minds practising their
homework
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, but the teachers should know take control
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of
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 the
homework
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 because the students are
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children
 and
don´t
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 have the age
as
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of
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 a
universitary
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university
 student.

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structure
Plan your essay first. Make a short plan with intro, two parts for the views, and a clear end.
coherence
Use clear linking words like On one hand, On the other hand, and finally to mean full link.
grammar
Be careful with grammar. Use simple, correct sentence form and check your verb tense.
content
Add specific examples or facts to back up each point to make your argument stronger.
content
The essay shows a basic idea of the topic and tries to discuss both sides.
structure
There is an introduction and a conclusion that show awareness of essay form.
analysis
Some good reasons are given for each side.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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