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the bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014

The bar compares the
production
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 and
usage
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 of electricity in the top ten
countries
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 in 2014.
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, China has the largest amount of
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 and
consumption
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usage
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 in these ten
countries
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, with nearly 11 times more than the least productive country, which is Korea.
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, most
of
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the
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countries
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 use more than the use except Germany. China, which has the highest
production
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 and use of electricity, accounted for 5398
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kwh
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 and 5322
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kwh
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, respectively. The second highest is the United States, where
production
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usage
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has
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the
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significant
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 apart from China; the amount of
usage
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 is 4099
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kwh
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and
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 the
consumption
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usage
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 is 3886
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. The third highest
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 in
production
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 and
consumption
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 is four times less than the second one, and the fourth and fifth
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doesn’t
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 have any apparent difference in
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. For the remaining
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, it doesn’t have
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 bias, but in these five
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, most of the
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 produce more than they consume,
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 Germany is an exception, where
consumption
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 was more than it produced.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, usage, countries, consumption, kwh with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hours (MWh)
  • electricity grid
  • renewable energy sources
  • fossil fuels
  • energy efficiency
  • consumption patterns
  • power generation
  • industrial demand
  • residential use
  • transmission losses
  • energy imports
  • sustainability
  • carbon footprint
  • energy policy
  • capacity
  • infrastructure
  • demand and supply
  • electrification
  • energy security
  • grid reliability
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