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Band 4

Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living In an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment. Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A few individuals choose to live in a
house
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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thinks
Correct subject-verb agreement
think
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 that
their
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there
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 is more
signifence
Correct your spelling
significance
 to live in apartments. Both have merit and demerits.
Nevertheless
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, I agree with
former
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the former
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view point
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viewpoint
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. Some
people
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 prefer
live
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to live
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 in a
house
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, because they feel more
independent
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independent,
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 like they can park
car
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their car
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 in
garage
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a garage
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 or in a driveway. They have
a
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an
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 option to make it as a custom
house
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 like
big
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a big
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 master
bed
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bedroom
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room
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, open to
blow
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the balcony
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 are inside the living
room
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. Easy to
assess
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access
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 to enter
in
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apply
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his
house
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. There is a main floor in a
house
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 with
second
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a second
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 floor with
bed rooms
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bedrooms
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and
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, and
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 they enjoy the facility of
bonus
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a bonus
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room
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.
The
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They
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 get
more
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a more
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 spacious and peaceful environment, farther more avail backyard facility. Houses are spacious for
the get
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getting
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togeather
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together
 at the time of parties. In
houses
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houses,
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people
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 can avail the facility of
basement
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a basement
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 where they can do
excersice
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exercise
, or make a bar with
theatre
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a theatre
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room
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hence
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, hence
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its
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it's
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the
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a
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 better investment,
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however
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however,
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 easy to
resale
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resell
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with
rapid
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rapidly
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 proliferating value invested amount in
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house
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the house
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.
On the other hand
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. Several
people
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 like to live in
high rise
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high-rise
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 buildings.
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However
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However,
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 they are less expensive
and
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, and
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their
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there
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 is
a
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apply
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no headache to remove the snow in winters. Some Individuals who want to live alone and have
less
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a smaller
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 budget
the
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apply
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give
priority's
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priority
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 to by
apartment
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an apartment
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. They can avail lots of facilities
in side
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inside
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 the apartments like gymnasium, library
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, etctera
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etctera
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etc
.
Their
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There
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is
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are
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few
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a few
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 drawbacks
like
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, like
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,
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apply
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 they feel more
disturbance
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disturbed
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for
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by
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neibhour's like
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neighbours, such as
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 when
some one
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someone
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 is walking on the upper floor,
several
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and several
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people
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not
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do not
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 tolerate the loud music
for
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in
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the
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apply
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other
appartments
Correct your spelling
apartments
To conclude
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this
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, I support
to live
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living
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 in
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house
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a house
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 without restrictions alongside a good value of money,
addition
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in addition
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 to
stay
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staying
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 in
calmly
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a calm
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environment.

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structure
State your position clearly in the introduction and restate it in the conclusion.
structure
Use clear paragraphs with topic sentences to show how each paragraph supports your view.
grammar
Check verb forms, plurals, and article use to fix basic grammar errors.
lexical
Use simple, precise words and avoid spelling mistakes and mis-typed words.
lexical
Provide more precise examples and avoid vague phrases.
content
The essay shows the idea of both sides with some examples like garage, basement.
coherence
You use 'On the other hand' to show contrast, which helps cohesion.
stance
You make a clear stand about preferring a house.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Spacious
  • Privacy
  • Customization
  • Equity
  • Neighborhood
  • Community
  • Driveway
  • Garages
  • Long-term investment
  • Landscaping
  • Renovate
  • Property value
  • Quiet environment
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