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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

In the coming era, various modes of
transportation
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the
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passengers
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like
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, like
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 cars, buses and
trucks
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trucks,
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 will be transformed
to
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into
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driverless
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. I consider
this
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 approach has higher weight on the demerits as compared to the meritorious side.
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 with, a
driverless
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transportation
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 system may cause a positive impact on the nation
as well as
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passengers
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. Automated vehicles always tend to follow rules and regulations more ethically
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 are mandatory for every vehicle
like
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 traffic signals and speed limits. Ergo,
It
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 has a significant effect on better safety for the individuals or
passengers
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 by reducing the violation of traffic rules in the nation.
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,
driverless
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transportation
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 is fully based on artificial intelligence,
it
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analyzes
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analyses
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 the road quality
like
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, like
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 potholes and directions
too
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, too
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which
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help
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 to reach the destination as fast as possible without facing congestion. On the flip side, owing to automated
transportation
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service
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, the
rate
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 of unemployment will skyrocket as it will replace the job of
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human drivers. Eventually, poverty will increase a lot.
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, there are enormous possibilities of technical issues
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 malfunction errors because of
driverless
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 technology based on automated machinery and software code
which
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 can cause hazardous
incidents
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incidents,
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as
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and
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 well accident
rate
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 will go up.
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recently
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recently,
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one
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a
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 major accident occurred in Dubai city
, the
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 individual was unable to control and solve his car’s malfunction error of speed
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while
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malfunction while
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 riding in a
driverless
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 car.
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 to
this
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,
driverless
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 cars can increase the probability of offence rates
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such
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 as hijacking the transport system by terrorists.
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,
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 the human driver can
scrutinize
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 the
passengers
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'
intention
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intentions
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which
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 helps to prevent hijacking risk in vehicles.
In contrast
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, AI has no features
of
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visualizing
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 and checking the
intention
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intentions
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 of
passengers
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. In conclusion, there are more cons as compared to pros because
driverless
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 vehicles may cause consequences to the country by increasing the
rate
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 of accidents owing to technical
error
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errors
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along
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, along
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 with the crime
rate
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 may rise
due to
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 limitations of technology.

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planning
Make a simple plan before you write. Put your view, then the pros, then the cons, and finish with your own clear idea.
cohesion
Use link words to make the flow smooth. Words like also, but, and, for example help a lot.
examples
Give clear examples. Explain what the example shows and how it supports your view.
grammar
Check your grammar. Use short, easy sentences. Avoid long, hard words.
task response
You state your view and keep to the task.
coherence
You discuss both sides of the topic.
structure
There is a conclusion that restates your view.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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