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Band 4.5

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

In the modern era, individuals in various countries prefer to purchase international
food
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 from a superstore. Both pros and cons will be discussed thoroughly in the forthcoming paragraphs. To explicate the former view, people are willing to buy an international
food
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 product,
due to
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 the spread of awareness by the
mart
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market
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.
This
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 creates a hype in the nation that can directly
impact
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 a person's mind
which
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, which
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 increases the curiosity to buy, because individuals love to taste new
food
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 products for developing their taste buds.
Moreover
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, exploring and consuming the imported
food
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 is necessary as
the
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a
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 single nation is not always able to grow all types of
food
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,
due to
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 atmospheric reasons.
In addition
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 to
this
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, consumption of new varieties of
food
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 creates a better
impact
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 on health by consuming
high nutrition
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 foods.
For instance
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, the most famous
food
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 ‘avocado’ is an American variety, which developed a hype towards
health conscious
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health-conscious
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 persons in India just because it contains an effective level of nutrients.
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, the cost of the
food
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 becomes higher than expected owing to the import charge,
as well as
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 taxes
are taken
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imposed
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 by
the
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apply
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both countries.
Also
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, the rules and regulations matter a lot for importing
food
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 from different countries.
Hence
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, the
middle class
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middle-class
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 families are not able to access
high quality
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high-quality
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food
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 owing to the fact that taxes, duties and transport charges make these products expensive.
Furthermore
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, the purchasing power of the individuals in terms of imported goods
are
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 higher,
then
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 it will negatively
impact
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 the local farmers because the purchase of national
food
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 will significantly decrease
which
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apply
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will
lead
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leading
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 to out of business by many farms. As a paradigm, the cost
for
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of
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 blueberries and raspberries is too expensive after importing them into India. The reason behind the higher price is the tariffs
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along
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, along
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 with transportation
cost
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costs
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 too. In conclusion, in my
opinion
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opinion,
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 purchasing international
food
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 helps to
increase
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stimulate
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 the taste buds of human beings.
Also
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, they can grab the opportunity to try the varieties of new
food
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along
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with
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which
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this
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apply
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will
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impact better
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better impact
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 on health in terms of nutrients.

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structure
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grammar
Use short and easy sentences. check grammar and spelling, like use of and, a, the.
examples
Give one or two real examples and say how they show the idea.
task response
Say your own view in a clear way in the end.
coherence
Use linking words like also, but, for example to move ideas.
structure
The writer uses both sides of the topic.
coherence
There is a simple plan and clear order of ideas.
language
Some words show meaning and the overall message is seen.
Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • nutrition
  • cultural exposure
  • competitive markets
  • economic boost
  • employment opportunities
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental impact
  • local produce
  • food security
  • global supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • consumer choice
  • market dynamics
  • price competition
  • agricultural sector
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