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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This
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 report analyses the pie chart and bar chart given below that represent the location of the
dance
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 classes by types and the distribution of younger
age
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 groups in a certain location
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 Australia.
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, most of the
dance
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 lessons are given in private
studios
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, where the smallest percentage of them are in college-based
studios
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. The total
number
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 of
students
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 below the
age
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 of 11 is slightly higher than the
number
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 between 11 and 16 years old. In detail, the pie chart shows that the private
studios
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 are the main place for
dance
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 classes by 48%. It is precisely double the second most common choice, which is after school lessons. The difference with the community halls,
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 18%, and the least preferred option, which is college-based
studios
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, is 8%.
Students
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 under 11 years old
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 mostly preferred ballet, with
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number
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 of 600. For
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age
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 group, only half attended the category of modern dancing. The
number
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 of
students
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 in the tap
dance
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 is around 450
students
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, which is slightly higher than the
number
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 between the ages of 11 and 16.
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, only 300 of the
age
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 group 11 and 16 preferred ballet, where the most common category is modern
dance
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, which is more than 500
students
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, age, studios, number, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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