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Some people believe studying literature is essential for individual character building, while others think it wastes time. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answear and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Nowadays, there is no doubt that reading
books
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 of benefits for
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people
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 believe that studying
literatures
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literature
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 can assist
individual
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individuals
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 to
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build
 their strong characters and enhance numerous
skills
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 for them,
other
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others
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 opine that it
just
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is just
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waste
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a waste
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 of
time
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 for them. I believe that reading
books
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 can enhance
people
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's communication
skills
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 and develop critical thinking.
This
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sides and represent my opinion regarding
this
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. On the one hand, reading
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 can provide plenty of benefits to learners
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 they gain plenty of
skills
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 and build their strong character in
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person
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people
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 gain numerous vocabulary and build critical thinking power
while
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 they are reading
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This
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skills
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is
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an essential for developing communication
skills
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 and public speaking.
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,
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a recent
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 survey of adults
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apply
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 who
are
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regulary
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regularly
reading
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 and
studying
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study
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the
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literature
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,
those
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they
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 are more
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successful
 and confident in public speaking compared
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avoid
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readings
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reading
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 in
daily
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their daily
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 routine.
Thus
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, studying and reading
books
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 including poetry, historical
literature
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 and dramas can play an
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essential
 role
for
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in
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bulding
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building
 character of
person
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.
Althought
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Although
 reading brings several
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 for individuals, it
also
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wasting
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wastes
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people
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people's
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 precious
time
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fast growing
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 world.
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currently
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currently,
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people
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 have different opinions and characters regards their choice
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 it is not
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required
each
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that each
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 individual share the same interest.
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, a
person
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 who is widely interested in arts and music
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apply
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can easily gain
immunce
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immense
 confidence by playing
a
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 instrument.
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,
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numbers
 of
people
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 currently
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find
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 reading
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a
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boaring
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boring
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, and
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simuntenusly
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simultaneously
 there are other
source
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sources
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 of entertainment available
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, including
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 watching podcast and
televsion
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television
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, which
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 helps them build their
characters
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character
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 by following their
ideal
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ideals
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.
Thus
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, reading and studying
literature
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 is
waste
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a waste
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 of
time
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 for those who are willing
learn
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to learn
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 and study from other
source
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sources
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. To
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summarise
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,
althought
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although
 reading and studying
literature
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 can help to build the character of that
person
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, it is
also
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waste
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a waste
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 of
time
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 for many
people
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. I believe that currently
people
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numerouse
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numerous
choice
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choices
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 for getting and developing their
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skills
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skills,
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whereas
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kindly
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depend
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depends
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their
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on their
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 choice, so reading is
excellent
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an excellent
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 way for building the
charcters
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character
 of
individual
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an individual
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.

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task response
In the intro, state your main view in one clear line and restate it in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea with a simple topic sentence and add a concrete example or fact to back it up.
grammar
Use easy grammar and correct spell and sentence form. Check your writing for errors.
coherence
Use clear links to move from one idea to the next, such as first, next, and also, but.
content
The essay shows an attempt to talk about both sides and to give a personal view.
idea
The link to skills from reading (vocabulary and thinking) is clear.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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