The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

As we can
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we have a graph showing the number of people participating in different kinds of sports in a region. We can see an elevation of tennis players over the years between 1985 and 2005
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, starting
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from 150 players to approximately 225
players
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players,
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where it apparently peaked in 2005. Unlike
Rugby
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Rugby,
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we can see it gained a lot of popularity in the
year1985
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year 1985
but
unfourtinetly
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unfortunately
declined after and lost its appeal in 2005
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, which
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could be the result of
genertional differance
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generational difference
. Coming to basketball and Badminton
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, which
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are keeping their
numbers
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number
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of
participant
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participants
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steady over the years

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • fluctuation
  • popularity
  • demographics
  • sports
  • region
  • data
  • analysis
  • comparison
  • notable
  • overview
  • highest
  • lowest
  • 20-year period
  • particular
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