IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Most countries allow 18-year olds to start driving a car. Some say it is good to allow at this age. But others think that the age to start driving should be at least 25. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

In the contemporary era, it is often argued that adults should be permitted to drive a car.
While
Linking Words
 I acknowledge that
this
Linking Words
age
Use synonyms
 is good, I believe that the legal
age
Use synonyms
 for driving should be twenty-five years. Those who prioritise that the seventeen-plus
age
Use synonyms
 should be allowed to drive.
This
Linking Words
 occurs because now, most adults are living in a nuclear family, and their parents have a hectic schedule.
Due to
Linking Words
this
Linking Words
, they are not able to go everywhere with their offspring.
For instance
Linking Words
, in Canada, over seventeen children have a driving licence, so they will not depend on their parents.
Therefore
Linking Words
, an eighteen-year-old should be allowed to drive a car.
However
Linking Words
, I agree with those who contend that if someone wants a driving licence, their
age
Use synonyms
 must be twenty-five.
This
Linking Words
 is because at
this
Linking Words
age
Use synonyms
, individuals are mature and they know what is wrong or right
while
Linking Words
 driving a vehicle, so it will decrease the rate of accidents on the roads.
For example
Linking Words
, in Japan, the accident rates are falling to twenty per cent as they change the legal driving
age
Use synonyms
. Ultimately, initiating a shift toward
this
Linking Words
 will be beneficial for the nation. In conclusion,
while
Linking Words
 a minimum
age
Use synonyms
 of driving should be eighteen-plus, with
this
Linking Words
, adults become independent. Ultimately, permitting people up to twenty-five years old should help to prevent accidents.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

structure
Plan before you write. Use four clear parts: intro, view one, view two, conclusion. State your view in the intro and keep it steady.
structure
Use simple links to show how ideas connect. Use 'on one hand' and 'on the other hand'.
content
Give stronger reasons for each view and add a clear opinion. Do not shift stance.
language
Fix grammar: 'seventeen-year-old', 'licence', 'driving' (American 'license' 'driving licence' depending).
content
Make facts more careful, avoid wrong numbers; if you give numbers, make them believable.
content
There is a clear attempt to discuss both sides.
structure
Some good attempts to link ideas with 'however' and 'in conclusion'.
content
Your idea is easy to follow in places.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »- a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: