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Students from all countries should have to learn English as a second language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There has been a considerable debate that has sparked lately. Some
people
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 believe that
studets
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students
from different regions should learn
English
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 as a second
language
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. Personally, I completely agree that all
students
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 should learn
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English
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the English
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language
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. As it helps them to communicate with
people
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 from different cultures and customs, and it facilitates
them
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their
educarional
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educational
 career to have better options in international countries.
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 with, learning
English
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 plays a significant role in
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modern society.
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 it significantly impacts
on
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communication. It
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for
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 cope with
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fear
 to
communcate
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communicate
 with
people
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 from different backgrounds, and
also
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 it feels like
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 it has blended all cultures into each other.
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,
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language
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, in
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recent years,
it is
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 the only
mean
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 to communicate
to
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with
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 others. As a foreign student in an international country, I use
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language
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 frequently, either to enhance my abilities in
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real-life
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 or to use it in
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daily life, with
people
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cannot
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who cannot
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 speak my first
tounge
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tongue
.
Therefore
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, most
students
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 learn
English
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 to
coummunicate
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communicate
 to
earn
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gain
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 a wide knowledge from foreign persons
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related to their majors.
Moreove
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Moreover
, learning
English
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 is a
primarly
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primary
 way to find a highly-ranked university, which opens better opportunities in international countries to pursue their academic career. The most importantly, in many cases, indviduals always look for an apt job to gain high salary job.
Threrefore
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Therefore
,
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language
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 allows them to have the qualifications to go
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, to have a
high qaulity
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high-quality
 life. In
conclousion
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conclusion
, I could
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 that,
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language
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 to turn their dreams into real outcomes.
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Although
studying
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language
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 has many opponents, it has shown
its
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significantly
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affects
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effects
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in
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on
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 the current
genertation
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generation
 and its impacts
in
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 their future.
Finally
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, I suggest that all
students
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 learn
English
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 and take
this
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 matter
serouisly
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seriously
. They have to
strart
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start
 immediately.

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content
Your view is clear, but add more clear proof for each idea.
structure
Plan your essay first: intro, one idea in each of two body paragraphs, then a short conclusion.
coherence
Use link words to join ideas, like and, but, also, for example.
grammar
Check spell and use main words in a simple way.
stance
You take a clear side and stay with it.
content
You show idea about study and work and how English can help.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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