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Life has become much more stressful compared to our parent’s generation. As a result, stress-related illnesses are increasing around the world. What are the causes of stress among young adults and what do you think can be done to overcome this problem?

There is no
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denying
 that the young generation
are
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is
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 not calm at all , compared with older people. They
experiencce
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experience
to
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too
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 much stress in
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live
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, and
certinly
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certainly
 it can be harmful. I
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,
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apply
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that now
much
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many
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 more youngsters are suffering from
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.
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 essay
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 to discuss
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 topic with relevant examples before reaching a conclusion.
Firstly
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, the most common thing among teenagers is pressure, especially from school.
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, during studies they have lots of
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exams
,
also
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 teachers are strict,
witch
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 is making them overthink
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, and
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 some diseases related to the heart .
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,
perents
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parents
 can help teens with support and do not demand high grades,
it
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 will significantly reduce stress.
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, it is not hard to help
young
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the young
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 generation to study in
safe
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a safe
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 environment.
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, young adults
also
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 have negative emotions.
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Furthermore
,a major part of them comes from work.
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with
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 elderly people, they have more competition in their
job
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jobs
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; if you are not the best, you
not
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do not
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 get the good payment. In my opinion, if
government
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the government
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 produce more
work places
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workplaces
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, it would be much easier and less stressful for younger people to get
experiance
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experience
.
To sum up
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, teenagers indeed
sufer
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suffer
 from stress in their lives. Unfortunately, nowadays it
become
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a daly
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daly
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daily
 routine, but we must not close our eyes
for
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this
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 problem. By the time we can learn to help each
others
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other
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, and make our lives better.

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language
Fix many spelling and word errors.
structure
Make one idea in each paragraph and keep to it.
structure
Have a short plan at the start and a short end.
vocabulary
Use easy words and the right form of words.
content
Give real facts or examples to back up points.
flow
Use small linking words like first, then, finally to show flow.
structure
Clear plan of introduction, body, and ending.
coherence
Uses 'First' and 'Second' to show order.
content
Talks on causes and ways to help.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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