The globalisation has brought both advantages and disanvantages.To what destent do you agree or disagree?

In my opinion, globalisation outweighs the advantages as compared to the disadvantages. Globalisation has helped the
world
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to become more interconnected, which raises the
economy
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level.
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Mcdonalds
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McDonald's
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started solely in America, their ingredients relying on fresh produce from nearby farms. With business being better, it has now expanded to many countries all over the
world
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, which brings in a higher income stream in the company,
overall
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increasing its net worth.
On the other hand
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, globalisation in companies can
also
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bring in negative outcomes. As the
world
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is constantly changing, and there are more political problems in the
world
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, it is important for these companies to know where they stand. If these companies support or
affliate
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affiliate
political
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stances that society does not agree with, people all over the
world
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can choose not to support them by any means
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as purchasing their products.
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can bring a significant impact
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their income stream,
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potentially affecting the business.

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task response
State your view in one clear line at the start and finish with a short restatement of your main idea.
development
Make each paragraph hold one big idea. Start with the good side, then the bad side, and end with your view.
coherence
Use linking words like also, but, so, and then to help flow between ideas.
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Add one or two real facts or numbers to back up each main point for strength.
grammar
Fix small mistakes in spelling and grammar to be easy to read (for example McDonald’s, not McDonalds; affiliate, not affliate).
strength
You state a clear view that globalisation has more good than bad.
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You give a real brand as an example.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • International trade
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Erosion of local cultures
  • Homogenization
  • Income inequality
  • Economic displacement
  • Competitive pressures
  • Environmental degradation
  • Pollution
  • Resource depletion
  • Climate change
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