In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

In recent times, the rise in obesity and drop in people’s
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health and fitness have become a major concern in many countries, especially those in the developed world.
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essay will consider two of the main causes of
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issue,
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some possible solutions. One of the main causes of increasing
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among the population is
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the fact that so much food and drink contains large amounts of carbohydrates. Junk food,
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, tends to contain high quantities of cheap pasta and rice,
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soft drinks often contain large amounts of
sugar
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. If these carbohydrates are not burned up through exercise, they will simply be converted by the body into fat, leading to
weight
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gain.
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, the public is getting less exercise, which means that not only will they gain
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, but they will
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experience lower levels of health and fitness. One of the main reasons for
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lack of exercise is our increasingly sedentary lifestyle. Whilst in the past, many individuals used to be engaged in manual labour
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as factory work or farming, today they are more likely to be sitting in an office, hunched over a computer.
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, those people are more likely to commute to work by
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, rather than walk or cycle, and we can see why the population is getting fatter and less healthy. There are some solutions to
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issue that governments could provide,
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as a
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tax. In countries where
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has been introduced,
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as the U.K.,
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has led to drinks manufacturers reducing the amount of
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in their products. I
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feel that higher levels of tax on petrol might make
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drivers think twice about whether they should really take the
car
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out on the road.
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, it is up to individuals to take more responsibility for their own health and fitness. They could make the effort to walk more and take the
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less, and make better choices regarding their diet, using information
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widely available on the Internet. In conclusion, sugary, carbohydrate-rich foods are one of the main causes of increasing
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, and
this
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problem has been exacerbated by our increasingly sedentary lifestyle.
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, government initiatives
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as a
sugar
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tax and encouraging the public to adopt a more active lifestyle can help counteract the problem.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • obesity
  • overweight
  • physical activity
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • exercise
  • unhealthy diet
  • fast food
  • urbanization
  • modernization
  • stress
  • awareness
  • education
  • government intervention
  • policies
  • promotion
  • sports
  • fitness programs
  • health education
  • taxation
  • public transportation
  • infrastructure
  • parks
  • recreational spaces
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