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Band 5

We are planning to improve The campus Wi System. What do you think could be improved? Write to your friend informal letter.

Hey Anna , I hope you've been doing well. It's been a
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 since we
last
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 caught up, so I thought I'd take a moment to write to you. Things have been
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quite busy on my side recently, especially with our college, which includes classrooms and internet access like WI Fi system. I'd really love to know how everything is going for you. Please let me know what you have been up to lately when you have a chance. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes,

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task response
The letter does not talk about ideas to improve the campus Wi‑Fi. Add 1–2 lines that name the changes you want and ask your friend what she thinks.
coherence and cohesion
For a better flow, use short, clear ideas in separate lines or small paragraphs. Use words like first, also, and then to link ideas.
tone
Friendly tone and good opening to talk with a friend.
structure
Clear greeting and closing.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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