Many people feel that urban environments are more unhealthy than they have ever been. What do you think are the main causes of this problem? What measures can be effective in tackling this problem?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Overpopulation
  • Pollution
  • Resources
  • Industrial activities
  • Emissions
  • Waste disposal
  • Garbage accumulation
  • Ventilation
  • Infrastructure
  • Globalization
  • Green spaces
  • Lifestyle
  • Healthy habits
  • Air quality
  • Water pollution
  • Soil contamination
  • Environmental damage
  • Health risks
  • Sustainable development
  • Public transportation
  • Renewable energy
  • Recycling
  • Urban planning
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