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The graph below shows the price of bananas in 4 different countries from 1996 to 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph illustrates
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prices
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 in four different countries during the period from 1994 to 2004.
Overall
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, it can be seen that no similarities in
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prices
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 among those countries,
while
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 in Japan was the highest price almost throughout the period. By 1994, Japan already led the
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prices
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 at around 1.8 US$ per kilogram.
Furthermore
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,
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prices
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 fluctuated significantly
in
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between 1.5 US$ and 3 US$ per kilogram.
In contrast
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 with the USA,
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prices
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 began at just over 0.5 US$ in 1994 and remained stable by the end of 2004 at over 1 US$. In
France
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 and Germany,
banana
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prices
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 experienced
quite
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 similar pattern. In
France
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, the
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was
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 over 1.5 US$
slightly
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, slightly
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 higher than in Germany at approximately 1.4 US$. The
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 in
France
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 and Germany showed several drops,
whereas
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France
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 showed
dramatically fell
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 to 1 US$ and ended the
prices
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 at around 1.5 US$ and over 1 US$ respectively.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words banana, prices, france with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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