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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In today's
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 world, individuals
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hold
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 diverse opinions on a wide range of topics. Regarding the issue of characters and cultural judgment on the basis of
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 wearing Styles . Opinions are divided, with some supporting it
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 others oppose it. In my personal view, it is important to critically analyse both sides of
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 before forming a
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 opinion. Those in favour of judgment argue that every nation
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 different
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 and customs which will help
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 to identify .
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 that
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an individual
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 unique style or attire
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throughout .
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, in 2002,
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research was conducted by Mental Health University,
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 ''Most
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 traditional
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 are more likely to
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 on the basis of character and
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 nd showed interest in getting involved in their
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'' .
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people
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in
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adopting
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 new things .
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, opponents of
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 raise valid concerns
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 as changing their own
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 on the basis of
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 .
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 highlights the potential risks associated with cultural
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attraction
. A study was conducted in
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2003 by ''Hindustan Times Of India'',
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people
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that people
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 who
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 more attraction towards
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 and
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 are engaged in
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adapting
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 and leaving their own .
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, critics point out that
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 will make
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 worried about
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 their dignity and cultural aspects. In conclusion, the debate surrounding
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 opinion
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 judging
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 and character
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from
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 their clothes is
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 with valid arguments on both
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sides
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.
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 supporters
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 the benefits, opponents
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raise
 important
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. After examining
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 the arguments for and against
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culture
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 and character from their choices of clothes, it is crucial to weigh the evidence carefully before forming a definite opinion. Ultimately,
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a balanced
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 essential in navigating complex issues .

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task
Plan your answer before you write. Start with a clear view in the first paragraph.
structure
Use clear and simple paragraphs. Give one main idea in each body paragraph with a simple topic sentence.
content
Give real, simple examples that fit the topic and can be checked.
language
Use only easy words and short sentences. Check spellings and basic grammar.
grammar
Read again to fix mistakes like 'their'/'there' and subject-verb errors before you finish.
content
You try to cover both sides of the issue.
content
You link clothes to culture and talk about how people can be read by dress.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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