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some students graduate and wish to study overseas while other students stay home. Give the advantages and disadvantages of doing this

Good Morning, I trust
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 email finds you well. I am happy to share my
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 with you. As you can see, I am a career teacher. It is fortuitous that I am available at the present
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. My most recent teaching position was at the International
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 of Kuwait. I was there for the past 3 years. Even though I am Canadian, I happily and readily agreed to a local hire contract. Not to downplay
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, but the salary was
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 not commensurate with my age and experience. Even though it was my choice, it was still a first for me. I did it because the
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 was going through a difficult
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 I wanted to be part of the solution.
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, I
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 really liked the students and the staff, making it an easy decision. After 3 years, it was
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 to explore a different teaching position. On a personal note, my
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 mom had health issues
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 past summer, so I decided to take
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 semester off and spend
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 with her in Canada. She recently passed away. I am available to start immediately. I am a versatile teacher. I can teach any subject in the field of humanities to middle
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 or high
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 students. I am currently teaching some
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 classes
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 on part
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time
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part-time
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 basis at
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 College. I have taught
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 for the past 15 years at AUK and at L.C. I am a certified
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 instructor and examiner (invigilator). I am pleased to
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 bring
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 skill to the
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 and assist in preparing graduating students, most of whom will be
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 exam. I look forward to speaking and meeting with you in the near future. Thank you for your
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 and consideration. Sincere Regards, George

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style
The letter has a clear goal but some parts are long and talk in a hard way. Use short lines and simple words.
grammar
Fix small grammar and spelling errors to make the writing exact.
structure
Use short, clear sentences. Try to keep each line to one idea.
content
Show more about how you fit the job with one or two strong facts or examples.
conclusion
End with a simple note that asks for a talk or meeting to move next step.
tone
You show care for your family, which shows good character.
content
You have solid work in IELTS and in the school, which fits teaching roles.
scope
You say you can start soon and you bring useful skills.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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